Leon and his brother-in-law ken were out for the day. Leon’s mom had  other things to do and didn’t really care what they did. They just  decided to go around town when they came across a sign that said private  property. Leon always wanted to go check it out but knew it was wrong  if he crossed over on the land. Ken noticed the barn in the back and  wanted to go check it out. Ken is the oldest by the way, he's tall tan with light brown hair, brown eyes. Leon is the youngest by 3 years mid height, he's not to short not too tall, tan, blond hair, with blue eyes.   
         Leon still thought it was wrong but he wasn’t by himself so he  thought why not. As they were walking towards the barn Leon thought he  saw something run across the top floor, and he paused. At that point Ken  was almost inside when he looked back and got Leon’s attention. “Hey  Leon are you alright?” And Leon said, “Yeah I’m fine I thought I just  saw something.”
        So as they got into the barn Ken said they should split up. So as  Leon started walking he thought he heard someone whisper his name. Leon  went a little farther into the barn and said “Hello is anyone there?”  He feels a cool breeze and turns around. Ken on the other hand was  having blast looking at all the things he could find.  
       It’s not what Leon saw, it’s who Leon saw, and he saw Teofilo.  Well his ghost. This made Leon scream and run. When he ran he fell  through the hole in the loft. Ken went and ran to find him and tried to  help Leon up. But he had broken his ankle, and Leon couldn't walk all  the way back to his house like that.
        Ken went to see if Leon’s mom was back. When he explained what  happened his mom rushed out of the house and followed Ken to where this  whole thing happened. But when they got there Leon was gone and knows  where to be found. They looked all over for him and they still didn’t  find him. So his mom was crying because she thought he was dead.
          About three to four months later he ended up on Ken’s porch  knocking on the door. Ken opens the door not knowing who it was. Once he  saw it was Leon he was so happy that he was alive, because Ken and  Leon's mom thought he was dead. “Where did you come from? How could you  move you broke your ankle?” “I did and it healed, and I was with Teofilo  he said if I went with him he would keep me save.” “But he’s dead  remember, so where did he take you.”
          “To a place I couldn't really see it; it was so bright I want  to say it was a room. It made me feel really different.” “So you were in  this place for a couple months and you don't exactly nowhere or what it  looked like?” “Yes exactly. But I have to go now”. “Where, are you  going to see your mom?”
        “Yeah but before I do I need to figure out what I'm going to tell  her. If I tell her what I told you she will never believe me.” “But  even after I see her and tell her I'm fine I can’t stay.” “Why can’t you  I don't get it ?” “He told me if he healed my ankle right there when it  happened I had to go with him. He said it was for a reason I wasn't  supposed to be here anymore.”
           Here? “Like on this planet you have all right to be here as I  do, and a dead person can’t tell you otherwise.” “So I think the right  thing to do is go back to your mom and stay with her. If you want I  could even walk over there with you.” You know what Ken your right, I  can’t believe I was so stupid to believe someone who can’t really hurt  me.” “Well I'll talk to you later”. “Okay, bye Leon.”
          So moments later when he got home he ran into the house calling  “mom it’s me Leon! I'm home! Mom where are you?” So he just decided to  wait and take a nap on the couch, he was thinking maybe she went out to  do some shopping. Hours later when she finally came home from doing  stuff all day, she notices Leon on the couch runs over hugs him to death  and she really can’t believe that he’s here right now. “Leon wakes up.”
        “Mom ware where you I’ve been looking all over for you.” “I was  out getting some groceries and visiting some people. But where on earth  did you come from? I thought you were dead? But I'm so glad your okay.”
       “Just don't worry about it mom, I'm back and okay you don't have  to worry about me disappearing because it won’t happen again. “Leon you  know I want an answer why won’t you give me one?” “Mom please can we  just drop it.” “No we can’t you’ve been somewhere else but here for a  couple months and I want to know where that was.” “Okay fine but you’re  not going to believe me, but I've been with Teofilo.” “That's impossible  he’s dead how’s could you be with him.”
           “He’s the reason I broke my ankle in the first place.” “How  did he go and push you down.” “No mom he was trying to contact me I  guess you could say. I got scared because I saw him, ran and fell. Ken  didn't even know what was going on until it happened because we  separated.” “Why on earth would you separate in a place you haven't been  before you’re supposed to stay together? Especially because it was on  private property so you weren't even supposed to be there in the first    
             “See this is why I didn't want to tell you anything, you  would just over react.” “I just want to keep you safe Leon I'm not  trying to over react.” “Well didn't you do things like this when you  were younger?” “Yes but I knew it was wrong and I didn't want you to do  things like I did.” “Mom were all going to do things that are dangerous  but were going to learn from it. I mean if you once did it you shouldn't  get mad because we try it. That’s what makes things more tempting.
             “Alight we discussed this enough how about I go make some  dinner. “Sure I’m starving.” “Anything in mind you want to eat?” “Your  delicious spaghetti and meat ball” “Okay sure we can have that I haven't  had it in a while anyway” “After they ate they went to bed because they  were both really tired.”
 
ashley i really like you story as i was reading it i felt like i was getting pulled into it. you explained everything really well so i knew what was happening. the story was really interesting. i dont think you should change anything
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